Olympic Writing
Bonus: Imagine that you are sitting in the crowd at the opening ceremonies for the Rio Olympics this August. The ceremony has just started and all of the Olympic athletes are parading around the stadium in their uniforms when all of a sudden.... In your blog, write an ending to this short story. It should be approximately 10-20 sentences long.
My Writing :
The ceremony has just started and all of the Olympic athletes are parading around the stadium.They also had their best uniform on too. All of a sudden, one New Zealand athlete collapses while marching. Then the parade stopped, while two doctors try to see what happened. Shockingly the results came and they found out that he had not have much time to live. Then the doctors rushed quickly to their ambulance van and took the poor athlete. On their way they were chased by fast dogs.So they had to hurry even more to get away from the dogs. Then the doctor at the back checked the athletes heart rate dropped had dropped so they rushed even more. Soon they were almost at the hospital, so they went so fast that they crashed and the van flipped over. The doctor woke up and tried to get out but then he saw something leaking, then BOOM BOOM the van exploded. Suddenly it just turned out to be a dream for the athlete who died. 
Oh, no, my previous comment clearly hasn't been published. Sorry, Stanley, I commented on this story as soon as I read it because it was so powerful. I thought that you did a great job of building suspense and generating a real sense of excitement (and trepidation!). I was so nervous reading your story because I thought that the athlete really died. Thank goodness it was all a dream!
ReplyDeleteCheers, Rachel :)